Will I fail in the recent IELTS exam? (why?)

Many students do not even know the format of ‘ discuss both sides and your opinion’ and they think they have to write why some people think this way and others do negate it. This is not the question because ‘discuss’ means WHAT is it,and you need two reasons to support your answer. Your answer is what ‘ your own opinion’ so you need to support your opinion with two reasons. Below is the example of the above mentioned question ( not a proofread one though and it may contain some errors; however, it will help you to understand what is Task response and Coherence+ some complex grammar structures+ no idioms used because this is academia).

Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people.Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion. say this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many individuals believe it is a beneficial if foreign affairs included in the post-elementary curriculum where as rest of them say that it is a really worthless. In this essay, I will describe both sides of this topic and explain my perspective before reaching at a conclusion.

OR either side of this topic will be outlined and my viewpoint will be explained before reaching at a conclusion.

On the one hand, proponents of the former side of this topic advocate that  pre-higher-secondary school goers often needs to understand and learn global issues,for example,In some schools, apart from science,maths and languages, students should update their knowledge in events or issues that is related to other countries. On the other hand, the opposite group argue that it is merely a time-waste as they need to read and spend time for  updating it. For instance, students have to spend an extra period for this subject — global crisis or major events which is popular in other nations.

While we analyse this topic in detail,learning international issues are unnecessary because it is only a burden upon them. In particular, the purpose of school is the basic preparation, and they would have to prepare additionally as they need to fulfill the criteria. However, if they had not studied this subject, then they would not have to spend time for this. In contrast, it may be a wastage if they had to pursue this new syllabus. Therefore, pursuing an extra subject apart from the mainstream subjects is not  worthy and schools should not allow this subject.

In addition to that, this new approach will divert students’ attention from the main subjects.For instance, pre- university students are not that matured and they can get distracted very easily. If board allows this new subjects, students will sacrifice their most chunk of study time as this subject is so vast ;as a result,  they would concentrate on the deeper aspects of this subject and forget to achieve the fundamental lessons from the main subjects. Once their interest is stirred up into international level, it will be very difficult to bring them back onto the other subjects. Moreover, many students may fail in their other exams because of they will not  finish their lessons.If they fail in their test, they may required to study in the same year or grade again in many schools.Hence, in order to keep them focused on the essential subjects,secondary school syllabus should not have this new subject. As long as  students will fail due to this, it is unnecessary. 

In conclusion, it is felt that this subject should be avoided so that students will not be  diverted  their mind from main studies and overburdened;therefore, it is better to avoid it.