Young people who committed serious crimes such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished as the same as adults.
How far do you agree or disagree?
Key words
1,Young people = under 18
2, adults = 18+
The question doesn’t say young people means less than 18 (minors) but when you read the whole question, you will see it is the implicit meaning.
Your paragraph layout (possible):
Body -1 minor criminals vs adult criminals ( show should they be punished equally or not with a cogent reason . YOU should compare both sides, not just one side)
Body 2 Minor criminals vs adult criminals (same as above)
A wrong or failed attempt:
Body 1- adults
Body -2 , young people ( minors)
Result: You will lose task response and coherence. If you do so, I am not surprised when the result is (5.5-6.0) Most likely it will be a 5.5. YOU should get a 7 in task response and coherence.
—>Most intermediate students score 7 in vocab and grammar. If they do not care about the other two criteria, they would end up with ( 5+5+7+7= 24/4=6).
–> Basic/beginners would score 6 in task and coherence. So, ( 5+5+6+6 =22/4=5.5)
If your analysis is totally irrelevant,then it would be a failure. Many students did not understand this question is about ‘ minors/ under 18 people’. They generally wrote something. Remember, the specific your answer with RELEVANT examples (justifying ones), the higher your score will be.
Do you know that there is no Book or guide for TASK RESPONSE and COHERENCE? You need an experienced tutor and Examiner. If you didn’t care about those areas, then it is time to understand your IELTS writing requirements and learn it.
Here are some ways to achieve 7 or higher bands.
TASK+ COHERENCE +VOCAB+GRAMMAR (4 criteria)
Method 1:
5+5+9+9 = 28/4 = 7
This method only or mostly work with native speakers who at least got a higher education or equivalent. ESL students are not going to achieve this as they are going to make more 3 mistakes in Grammar and vocab. One of the keys to get 8+ band is make less than 3 mistakes in grammar and vocab. Find a grammarian then, lol! IELTS exam is a semi formal one so you can use pronouns and all. Do not worry about ‘ absolute statements’ such as ‘ it is felt that’ instead of ‘ I feel that’. In this case, candidates do not need to worry about task response and coherence. They can miss the question parts but it can not be very tangential.
Method 2:
6+6+8+8 = 7 band. The same as I said above but bit more relaxed in grammar and vocab part. Besides, they need to include all the parts of the question when they respond. THOUGH you do not have relevant examples, you can still achieve 6 in task and coherence.
Method 3:
7+7+7+7 = 7 (aka classical method):
Refer the band descriptor for 7 bands.
Similar methods are also available for 8 bands. This is how it works out.
For me, it is too hard to teach IELTS students as they believe in MYTHS (from online/colleges/tutors/students). IELTS is the most easiest exam but some people made it unachievable for the international students by teaching them wrong or false techniques that have nothing to do with the IELTS scoring.
